You seem to have lost the audio in the first scene
The opening titles should read:
"The Civil War in Syria began in earnest on 15th March 2011"
"By the end of 2012, 37000 people were estimated to have died during the conflict"
"Most of those" [pause, then add below] "civilians" [note spelling].
We will sort out the formating on Thursday, or one lunchtime this week.
I would include the credits sequence then. You will need to find some audio for the opening shot of the website (why a website? Why not a piece of moving image - there must be stacks"), and indeed clean up the rest of the audio on those clips.You need more credits (production credits as well as actor credits) so you will need a few more clips. You also need "something something something" [distributor] "something something something" [studio] "A film by Esther Wade" [or something]. Whatever you choose for distributor (probably Focus or Studio Canal) and studio (probably Film 4 or BBC Films) you will need to include the ident at the start (if you're not sure what I mean by that, ask).
Fade in on your opening shot
As I've mentioned before, the pan goes on way too long. Go for a static shot, lasting no more than 2-3s, which established the rural setting and your character in context
The shot of the guy with the dog is fine, but you need to have him in the previous ES to get the continuity.
The interview needs severe editing. You've actually only included three shots of your own here, one of which you need to replace. I would cut the interview right down. You could do with a scene where he confronts his editor and perhaps a scene while he is packing (maybe his wife arguing with him?) Maybe a montage over the top of the interview also of him preparing (researching, buying supplies, sorting out passport etc.?)
Basically, you have a huge amount of work still to do and, I would imagine, a lot more you need to shoot. If you're not sure about how to approach this, or about what sort of stuff you should be shooting, please speak to me as soon as possible.
You seem to have lost the audio in the first scene
ReplyDeleteThe opening titles should read:
"The Civil War in Syria began in earnest on 15th March 2011"
"By the end of 2012, 37000 people were estimated to have died during the conflict"
"Most of those" [pause, then add below] "civilians" [note spelling].
We will sort out the formating on Thursday, or one lunchtime this week.
I would include the credits sequence then. You will need to find some audio for the opening shot of the website (why a website? Why not a piece of moving image - there must be stacks"), and indeed clean up the rest of the audio on those clips.You need more credits (production credits as well as actor credits) so you will need a few more clips. You also need "something something something" [distributor] "something something something" [studio] "A film by Esther Wade" [or something]. Whatever you choose for distributor (probably Focus or Studio Canal) and studio (probably Film 4 or BBC Films) you will need to include the ident at the start (if you're not sure what I mean by that, ask).
Fade in on your opening shot
As I've mentioned before, the pan goes on way too long. Go for a static shot, lasting no more than 2-3s, which established the rural setting and your character in context
The shot of the guy with the dog is fine, but you need to have him in the previous ES to get the continuity.
The interview needs severe editing. You've actually only included three shots of your own here, one of which you need to replace. I would cut the interview right down. You could do with a scene where he confronts his editor and perhaps a scene while he is packing (maybe his wife arguing with him?) Maybe a montage over the top of the interview also of him preparing (researching, buying supplies, sorting out passport etc.?)
Basically, you have a huge amount of work still to do and, I would imagine, a lot more you need to shoot. If you're not sure about how to approach this, or about what sort of stuff you should be shooting, please speak to me as soon as possible.