0:00 - I rather like the opening shot, although you might be a little more adventurous with the editing considering the pace of the music. Some interesting framing. Would have been interesting to cut to some CUs of the figure in blue, to break up the sequence, perhaps travelling with them for a bit? You hold on this for a little long 0:15 - reasonable edit for the entry through the door, although perhaps a CU to break this when she turns the handle would help? 0:20 - I like the use of the tilt to hide the character's face - rather atmospheric use of tracking. The following shot is also rather good - you build up the tension well - although you hold a little long after the figure has exited the frame at 0:33. 0:36 - Is the use of the canted angle deliberate? If so, I'm rather impressed - it gives the film quite a Film Noirish quality. Note the implications with filming in a somewhat dark space - you end up with a lot of degradation of image. 0:38 - You don't need the crossfade here because no time seems to have passed. I would take the music out a little more gradually. 0:46 - similarly, you don't need the fade here - you could have used straight cuts and just made more of the character pouring the tea 0:58 - your framing is generally very good, although I think the two shot here could do with being slightly to the right (there is perhaps a little too much wall next to the figure on the left). However, this shot does manage to communicate her power (with the other character seemingly being ejected from the frame), so if this was intentional, well done! 1:01 - again with the fades! You should be cutting if the sequence is, effectively, taking place in "real time" - the fade denotes the passage of time. You've also broken the 180 degree rule (but don't worry about that - we'll be considering it next half term). A nicely framed MCU (and indeed some very well shot CUs). The editing could perhaps be slightly slicker. Overall, this is a very proficient piece. You have clearly developed in confidence and have used both a range of shots and camera angles. You have demonstrated an evident ability to plan your shoot for the edit and thought through issues of location and logistics well, which was the main aim of the task. You should aim to concentrate on the technical aspects now, considering how to string shots together to create a logical progression, as well as thinking about the kind of edits it is appropriate to use. Very good work - well done!
0:00 - I rather like the opening shot, although you might be a little more adventurous with the editing considering the pace of the music. Some interesting framing. Would have been interesting to cut to some CUs of the figure in blue, to break up the sequence, perhaps travelling with them for a bit? You hold on this for a little long
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0:20 - I like the use of the tilt to hide the character's face - rather atmospheric use of tracking. The following shot is also rather good - you build up the tension well - although you hold a little long after the figure has exited the frame at 0:33.
0:36 - Is the use of the canted angle deliberate? If so, I'm rather impressed - it gives the film quite a Film Noirish quality. Note the implications with filming in a somewhat dark space - you end up with a lot of degradation of image.
0:38 - You don't need the crossfade here because no time seems to have passed. I would take the music out a little more gradually.
0:46 - similarly, you don't need the fade here - you could have used straight cuts and just made more of the character pouring the tea
0:58 - your framing is generally very good, although I think the two shot here could do with being slightly to the right (there is perhaps a little too much wall next to the figure on the left). However, this shot does manage to communicate her power (with the other character seemingly being ejected from the frame), so if this was intentional, well done!
1:01 - again with the fades! You should be cutting if the sequence is, effectively, taking place in "real time" - the fade denotes the passage of time. You've also broken the 180 degree rule (but don't worry about that - we'll be considering it next half term). A nicely framed MCU (and indeed some very well shot CUs). The editing could perhaps be slightly slicker.
Overall, this is a very proficient piece. You have clearly developed in confidence and have used both a range of shots and camera angles. You have demonstrated an evident ability to plan your shoot for the edit and thought through issues of location and logistics well, which was the main aim of the task. You should aim to concentrate on the technical aspects now, considering how to string shots together to create a logical progression, as well as thinking about the kind of edits it is appropriate to use. Very good work - well done!